The Running Of Snowball

There was an eerie sound. Before the door slowly opened and nine gargantuan dogs appeared.Their teeth bared eyeing me before pouncing. I managed to slip away in the nick of time,in that moment I was out the barn doors, I glanced behind me and saw these brutes of animals still chasing me. As I was looking back I saw all the animals shocked and amazed at the events that were happening. I sprinted along the pasture as if I was in the 100 metre dash,I ran as fast as my four legs could take me, but the dogs were hot on the heels of my trotter. I suddenly slipped. I regained my footing and continued (running faster than ever). They gained on me. One clamoed its jaws on my tail. But I whisked away safely.Then I put on an extra spurt and, with a few inches to spare, slipped through a hole in the hedge and was seen no more…


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4 responses to “The Running Of Snowball”

  1. jnorth Avatar
    jnorth

    Meshach,

    Your vocabulary helps to show a sense of fear and impending doom.
    You are able to demonstrate that you can vary sentence lengths and structures for effect.

    Target: Always re-read and edit sentence structures – is your intended meaning clear. Look again at your first three sentences – where could you include commas to help show your intentions?

  2. meshach Avatar
    meshach

    what is my target grade
    thanks, meshach

  3. jnorth Avatar
    jnorth

    Hello Meshach,

    Your target grade is 7B.

    Thanks,

    Mr North

  4. meshach Avatar
    meshach

    Hello Mr. North
    what is my curreent level? and what do i have to do to get a 7B?
    thanks
    Meshach

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