Oct 6, 2013 - 
Communication 
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Communication 2 Comments Water poem
As I stood on the edge of the savage sea
Looking as it crashed against the jagged rocks
Roaring like a bloodthirsty lion
As the sense of panic flooded me
That last line is genius!
I quite agree, Mr Waugh. Meshach, your representation of the sea is stirring and menacing. You speak from a place that allows real identification for you reader. I imagine your speaker in the midst of an epiphany – well done.
Target: Remember to use punctuation – even in poetry. Although, here it seems it may have been deliberate, was it?